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Unit Three : Ensure that
Pronoun References are
Clear in Meaning
代名詞必須清楚的使用
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如果代名詞所指的人
物或事物不能交待清
楚,也是徒增讀者困
惑。 。
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The machines can process the
family of parts, ensuring that it
reaches full capacity.
較佳 : Capable of processing the
family of parts, the machines
reach full capacity.
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All parts have the same
transportation costs, which limits
the effectiveness of traditional
approaches.
較佳: All parts have the same
transportation costs, thus
limiting the effectiveness of
traditional approaches.
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The department chairman told the
research assistant that she needed
to perform the simulations in the
event that the experiment fails.
較佳: The department chairman
told the research assistant, "You
need to perform the simulations
in the event that the experiment
fails."
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Deterioration is set to a
constant fraction of the stock
level, which implies that
shortages are not permitted
and the demand rate is
assumed to decrease
exponentially.
較佳: The fact that
deterioration is set to a
constant fraction of the
stock level implies that
shortages are not
permitted and the
demand rate is assumed
to decrease exponentially.
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When a machine is assigned to a
manufacturing cell, it attempts to
reduce the total cost.
較佳: When assigned to a
manufacturing cell, a machine
attempts to reduce the total cost.
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The posterior objective
concentrates on balancing intracell
and intercell machine loadings,
which allows us to formulate the
cell formation problem as follows.
較佳: The fact that the
posterior objective
concentrates on
balancing intracell and
intercell machine
loadings allows us to
formulate the cell
formation problem as
follows.
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Factors C, D, F, G and H
significantly affect the response
average. This indicates that F can
be adjusted based on the target
value.
較佳: Factors C, D, F, G
and H significantly affect
the response average.
This finding (observation,
occurrence, phenomenon,
event) indicates that F
can be adjusted based on
the target value.
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You should maintain a constant
cutting speed even though the
effective diameter of the cutting
changes during machining.
較佳: A constant cutting speed
should be maintained even
though the effective diameter of
the cutting changes during
machining.
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In most previous investigations,
they do not consider the
simultaneous effects of
deterioration and inflation.
較佳: Most previous
investigations do not consider
the simultaneous effects of
deterioration and inflation.
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A numerical example
demonstrates the effectiveness of
the proposed method, which
further indicates that the total
system cost will be incorrectly
estimated if the deteriorating effect
and/or inflationary effect are
neglected.
較佳: A numerical
example demonstrates
the effectiveness of the
proposed method, further
indicating that the total
system cost will be
incorrectly estimated if
the deteriorating effect
and/or inflationary effect
are neglected.
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