MEL-Con Revisions/Sample Watch the teacher as she writes a MEL-Con paragraph. Compare with yours. Fix yours. Turn in for MORE POINTS! Main Idea (topic sentence) Your statement clearly and accurately states the main idea. Makes a direct and concise argument or claim References the counterargument Previews your reasoning Main Idea (topic sentence) Although Christianity and African beliefs have some differences, these two convictions share more than enough similarities, and, therefore, we should be able to respect one another regardless of belief. Main idea = comparison between Christianity and African beliefs Direct/Concise argument = they are more similar Counterargument = they have some differences Reasoning = we should be able to respect one another regardless of belief. Evidence (examples, facts) Strongly proves the main claim Does not ignore the counterargument Makes specific reference to the text Includes at least one text quotation Incorporated smoothly with transitional words/phrases Link (your explanation of how the example links to or supports your main idea) Includes sentences that explain HOW your evidence supports your main idea. How your differences/similarities reveal a conflict or values/beliefs Explanation is unique Moves the reader beyond the main idea Evidence #1 + Link #1 Some view the African and Christian beliefs to be mostly different because of their opinions of nature. The African believe that nature is so important that there must be a god for each aspect of nature. “Olokun ruled the endless water and wild marshes” and Olorun “ruled the sky.” Each of the gods was responsible for one portion of nature. This proves that they valued nature. Christian belief shows that they, too, believe in the importance of nature, but nature serves another purpose in the Christian belief. Instead of nature being so important that it must have multiple gods surrounding the creation, the Christians believe that nature is there to serve and provide for humans, the true ruler of land. Yes, the Christian God created all, but it was stated in the creation myth that humans must “have dominion over the fish of the sea and over the birds of the heavens and over every living thing that moves on earth.” This demonstrates the power that humans have over nature. So, even though they believe in nature differently, it is still clearly an important aspect of each belief and we, therefore, should find common ground between the two. Conclusion (recap/summary) Final statement gives the paragraph closure Summarizes your claim and evidence Creatively paraphrases the main argument Not a simple repetition. Conclusion It is very clear that the African belief and the Christian belief had differences; it would lack any creativity or diversity if everything was the same. Even through all of the differences, the similarities are there to provide some common aspects and values that connect the two convictions. Difference of opinion and belief is what makes this world interesting, but it’s the common interest of faith and values that brings us all together.