### Loose Now, Pay Later[1]

```Loose Now, Pay Later
Carol Farley
3rd Hour
Marina Trolinger
Mercedes Loftus
Summary
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This short story is about two friends, Deb and Trinja, who come to the mall every day
after school. One day they notice a new shop at the far end of the mall where hardly anybody
ever goes. The stores’ name is Swoodies, and the friends decided to go inside. No one is in
the store to run it and the sign says that everything is free. There is one problem, everyone is
gaining weight like crazy because no one can stop shoving the Swoodies candy in their
mouth. The friends noticed a sign near the booth that said THE SLIMMER. They walked over
there and a woman told them to just step inside and lose any unwanted fat. Deb stepped in
the machine for about 30 seconds and stepped out. Deb was 5 pounds lighter. So Trinja
collected all of the money she had and went in the slimmer. Trinja lost 12 pounds because of
it. The woman had to give Trinja a prick on the wrist for every 10 pounds they lose, but they
were too happy to care.
Deb’s younger brother was very suspicious of this and was saying that aliens are trying
to turn our fat into power for their world, and that they built Swoodies to speed up that
process and the slimmer to transfer the fat and harvest it into energy. But the girls thought
he was just a stupid 10 year old kid. He also said that the pricks on your wrist were seen by
the aliens. If you had too many pin pricks, your fat content won’t be any good anymore. But
the friends thought that the pricks looked cool, like delicate tattooed bracelets, and that they
both looked really neat on their wrists.
Focus Question
• What if you could eat all of the
candy you wanted and never
gained any weight?
Exposition
It deals with the beginning setting, characters, and
initiating action.
Exposition
• The exposition deals with the two best
friends, Trinja and Deb.
Exposition
• They go to the mall every day after
school. The friends see a store in the
corner of the mall called “Swoodies”.
Exposition
• The girls decide to go in it. When they
enter, they are swarmed with amazing
smells of different candies and flavors.
They notice a sign that says “FREE”, and
there is also no one working or running the
store.
Rising Action
The rising action leads to the climax. It builds suspense
and leads up to the turning point of the story.
RISING ACTION
• The Rising Action in “Lose Now, Pay Later.”
begins when they enter the store and try all of
the candy in Swoodies’
Rising Action
• After about a week goes by Swoodies
Candy Store is the most popular store in
the mall.
Rising Action
• Soon the fat filled candies cause people to
gain weight quickly. That is when the
Slimmer's come into town. A Slimmer is a
machine that sucks body weight straights
off of you in less than 20 seconds.
Rising Action
• The only catch other than loosing one
pound for 25 yen is that every ten pounds
a blue dot is inserted into your wrist by a
tiny shot.
Climax
The climax is the turning point in the story that nobody
expects. It is a discovery or a change in the situation.
Climax
• The climax is when Trevor tells everyone about what
he thinks the aliens plan is. He thinks the aliens are
using the fat as energy. He thinks maybe the
Swoodies are here so people will get fat quicker so
that there’ll be more to harvest through the slimmer
machines.
Climax
• Trevor says the spaceships are invisible to
humans. He also thinks the blue marks on
everyone’s wrists mean a count because when
there’s too many, people will be culled from
the flock because their fat isn’t good enough.
Falling Action
The falling action is occurs after the climax or
resolution. It ties up the loose ends and the story
comes to an end.
Falling Action
• The falling action is when Debby says she
could quit eating Swoodies whenever she
pleases. Humans would never sacrifice their
freedom and dignity just to eat and still be
thin.
Falling Action
• Also, she and Trinja enjoy their blue dots on
their wrists. They think it looks like a pretty
blue bracelet.
Science Fiction Elements
• Our short story had multiple science fiction
elements. It included aliens, unpractical
machines, and candy appearing from no
where.
Story Responses
• Lose Now Pay Later
• By Carol Farley
Story Responses
• Mercedes says, “This short story is very
entertaining and compelling.”
• Marina says, “I think this story was very
exciting to listen too. You never know what
will happen next!”
• Mikel says, “ I think this short story was very
interesting and different. I liked the writers
way of literature.”
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