Exercise 7

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Exercise 7
No.1
 (Original) Genetics (has, have) drawn
increasing interest in recent years.
 (Revised) Genetics has drawn increasing
interest in recent years.
No.2
 (Original) A statistical Taguchi approach in
addition to a backpropagation neural network
model (is, are) developed in this study.
 (Revised) A statistical Taguchi approach in
addition to a backpropagation neural network
model is developed in this study.
No.3
 (Original) Neither conventional models nor
previous literature (address, addresses) the
backpropagation delay problem in this structure.
 (Revised) Neither conventional models nor
previous literature addresses the
backpropagation delay problem in this structure.
No.4
 (Original) Unknown variables or time
significantly (influence, influences) the product
quality when the machine parts are in close
proximity to each other.
 (Revised) Unknown variables or time
significantly influences the product quality
when the machine parts are in close proximity
to each other.
[Note 2.12]
 Avoid wordiness by saying near instead of in
close proximity to.
No.5
 (Original) The number of theoretical
investigations on bubble/liquid displacement in
a tube (is, are) increasing.
 (Revised) The number of theoretical
investigations on bubble/liquid displacement in
a tube is increasing.
No.6
 (Original) The physical phenomena associated
with gas penetration within the polymer melt
(require, requires) further clarification.
 (Revised) The physical phenomena associated
with gas penetration within the polymer melt
require further clarification.
No.7
 (Original) Neither of the conditions (affects,
affect) gas penetration within the polymer melt
much.
 (Revised) Neither of the conditions affects gas
penetration within the polymer melt much.
[Note 2.13]
 Depending on the sentence’s context,
significantly, markedly, and substantially can
be used as alternatives to much and greatly
when the Chinese meaning is 很多.
No.8
 (Original) Members of the scientific
community that (studies, study) genetic
similarities between rats and humans (is, are)
divided on the issue.
 (Revised) Members of the scientific community
that studies genetic similarities between rats
and humans are divided on the issue.
No.9
 (Original) Either surface tensions or thickness
ratio (plays, play) an important role in
determining the interface shape of a bubble
nose.
 (Revised) Either surface tensions or thickness
ratio plays an important role in determining the
interface shape of a bubble nose.
[Note 2.14]
 Depending on the sentence’s context, critical,
crucial, essential, pertinent, relevant,
significant and vital can be used as alternatives
to important when the Chinese meaning is 重要.
No.10
 (Original) Each of the conditions (is, are) far
more complicated than reported in the above
studies.
 (Revised) Each condition is far more
complicated than reported in the above studies.
No.11
 (Original) Melt temperature accompanied by
mold temperature in all cases (impact, impacts)
skin melt thickness.
 (Revised) Melt temperature accompanied by
mold temperature in all cases impacts skin melt
thickness.
[Note 2.15]
 Avoid wordiness by saying always instead of in
all cases.
No.12
 (Original) To test the constructed network
model and to identify the real optimal
parameter setup (is, are) of primary concern in
this study.
 (Revised) To test the constructed network
model and to identify the real optimal
parameter setup are of primary concern in this
study.

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